Tuesday, March 6

Intent

It nestled in the subtle hollow of creamy pale skin, winking at him. A dark green that was surprisingly translucent when sunlight touched it. The globular gibbousness of it entranced him. He imagined containing it in his palm. Cold to the touch at first, but warming up quickly. The smoothness of the surface interrupted by the little lines of engraving. Rays of the sun on one hemisphere hallowing a fiercely smiling face; and the intertwined moon and star on the other. She bent down to pick up a fallen piece of paper and it swung free of the bare restraint of her plunging neckline. Its weight perfectly balancing its upswing with the downswing. Was it soapstone? He'd never had much of a head for geology. He wondered if it was a symbol of something. Young people these days adopted new cults with the noble air of giving stray dogs a home. He liked the subtle mysterious green of it. He almost put his hand out to touch it. Just once to roll it between his fingers. He felt her eyes boring into him. He looked up, realisation dawning with a horrified whimper. "No, no, I wasn't.." he protested faintly, hurriedly. She collected her bags and stalked off the bus. Her haughtily stiffening spine luxuriated in the freedom of expected abuse. Please, he wanted to say. Just please.

20 comments:

Cloudy said...

Wow. Nice writing :)

And, first!

Szerelem said...

Nice.

*Ridiculously curious as to what it is*

Confused & Baffled said...

aaah...the number of times i've been similarly misunderstood.

*hopes he hasnt destroyed the feel of the post, which by the way is as always beautiful*

Anonymous said...

Cataclysmic...
Poor kid!
Funny as it seems - spare a thought for the guy. Epitome of Disaster, i say!!
The ending could've been better. Maybe the girl COULD HAVE got ideas (and better ones at that) and who knows, Flaffy - we might have had a Romeo & Juliet on our hands! What say, huh?

Revealed said...

@Cloudy: Ty :)

@szerelem: Ty. It is a soapstone pendant type thing I have, strung on to black thread and looped around my neck :D. A thing of beauty!

@C&b: I empathize. That's why I decided to give the guy benefit of doubt :D. In memory of all the guys who were similarly misunderstood (if there *are* any, which i doubt).

@BM: Why not :D. If I got ideas about every guy who leered at me on a bus I'd be married with ten kids by now :P

Anonymous said...

Ten KIDS, Flaff?
Thought kids were supposed to be innocent! /:)
Well, what do we know!:p

Anonymous said...

Oh and if you mean have ten KIDS, Think Again! :P

Revealed said...

@BM: Lol!!! :P

My bad! But at least I didn't say married TO ten kids. Hehehe.

Renovatio said...

Once I tossed an eraser at someone... it bounced and landed bang in the middle of our classmate's bosom...

Heh Heh said...

nicely written. a bit creepy, though.

Revealed said...

@renovatio: I feel your pain, I do :D

@heh heh: Men *are* creepy!! (especially the ones on any kinda public transportation. I don't know what it is about p.t. that brings them out. Creepers Anon type thing)

Heh Heh said...

another sledge! i take p.t. all the time, and i promise i won't leer at you if you happen to take the same bus as me.

Revealed said...

And now, I believe I'm insulted!

wiseling said...

very much liking this post. will try to do followup if first flaffer not minding. ass currently being kicked by exams. sigh.

Revealed said...

First flaffer would adore it :)

All the best, hun.

Shreyasi Deb said...

Talented Flaff!
I loved your work on 55 worded fun too

Revealed said...

@sd: Ty :). I had suchhh fun!

Princess Stefania said...

If that's the way the male mind works, then I've wronged many innocent souls.
;)
Lovely.

Szerelem said...

It is a soapstone pendant type thing I have, strung on to black thread and looped around my neck

OH. I obviously have a dirty twisted mind....
Also, I wanted to blogroll you...?

Revealed said...

@p.s: Ty :). But let's not get carried away :P. I don't think the average male mind works like that!

@szerelem: Heheheh. Please do :). I wanted to do the same :D